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Post by Deleted on Mar 17, 2015 21:22:09 GMT -5
Basic Information Player Nickname: Ari Profile URL: (to be made) Do you want other role players to give you feed back? Yes I don't mind role playing Dick as Robin or Nightwing. My default version of Dick is Nightwing because being solo you have a little more freedom. Face Claim's Name: Brant Daugherty
Name: Richard Grayson Alias: Robin/Nightwing Race: Human Age: 28 (Younger depending on the time fame) Birthday: March 21, 1986 Alignment: Neutral Good Height: 5’10” Weight: 175 pounds Hair: Black Eyes: Blue
Physique: Athletic Frame. He is strongly built but still very agile because of gymnastics and circus performances all his life.
Training: Master Detective, Master Acrobat, Martial Artist: Aikido, Jeet Kune Do, Escrima, Tae Kwon Do, Judo, Wing Chun, Hapkido, Jiu-jitsu, Shotokan Karate, Savate, Kendo, Ninjitsu, Boxing and Tang Soo Do. Multi-lingual, Skilled Leader
Equipment: Cellphone, Microlight, Grappling gun, Bolas, Mini Tracers, Rebreather, Tasers, Escrima Sticks, Throwing Disks and Nightwing Costume.
Description
Appearance: Grayson current costume is made of a version of the Nomex fire-resistant, triple-weave Kevlar-lined material. It is an excellent protection against damage, and it's also electrically insulated. The suit is light sensitive, darkening when there is more light in the area. It is stylized with a light blue "V" that goes up to his shoulders and down to his fists. Nightwing's costume is more light-weight and not as armored protected as it was build for more speed and movement. If Nightwing need to engage an enemy who is a heavy hitter, he has body-armor overlays which he can attach to his gauntlets, his chest, his mask, his shoulders, and boots.
Personality: Grayson is talkative, cocky, easily bored, very hot-tempered at times. Unlike his mentor he does not brood on his parent's deaths but moved past them. Dick has a sense of humour which is ironic because of everything he's been through. A strong leader with a personable demeanour he can keep a group together and is thought of the glue that ties the many groups and leagues together. Truthfully Grayson would rather not lead but when he is asked he usually does a good job of it. When it comes to those he sees as Family and friends Grayson will defend them without hesitation.
Significant relationships
Bruce Wayne – Batman: After the murder of his parents, Bruce Wayne became his father figure and as Batman he became his mentor. With his acrobatics training and his sense of justice, he became Batman's trusted partner, Robin. When Dick joins the New Teen Titans, his absence in Gotham strained their relationship. This prompted Bruce to force Dick to retire as Robin, ending their partnership. Furious, hurt, and confused, Dick left Bruce and didn't return. Dick is now trying to mend his relationship with Bruce. But he has trouble looking Bruce in the face now. After he left Blockbuster to die, he feels that he failed Bruce's ideals for him due to that.
Barbara Gordon - Batgirl/Oracle: One part of Dick’s famous love triangle. Since Barbara put on the mantle of Batgirl, there was an instant attraction between Dick and Barbara. They dated before Dick and had a strong relationship, until he joined the New Teen Titans. The distance and new feelings for Starfire strained and ended their relationship. After his failed wedding with Starfire, Dick and Barbara started to rekindle their relationship, it leading to Dick proposing to her. But due to the issues that arose from Infinite Crisis, he found Barbara halting their engagement and ending their relationship. They are good friends now and are confidants for each other. But, Dick still has feelings for her, he thinks he always will, but he is giving her time, and waiting for her to figure out what she wants.
Koriand’r - Starfire: The other part of Dick’s famous love triangle. Dick and Koriand’r meet when Raven was building the New Teen Titans. Koriand'r gained the ability to speak English when she kissed Dick to assimilate it. This ignited a romance between them. Their relationship helped Dick to grow as a person and help him find his identity aside from Batman. Dick and Koriand’r were almost married but their wedding was interrupted by Raven who was possessed by her. The failed wedding brought to light to their problems with their relationship, so the two ended mutually chose to end their relationship and to only be friends. Despite this, Dick still loves Koriand’r, but it’s complicated.
Slade Wilson – Deathstroke: No villain has defined Dick more so than Slade. Being one of the earliest villains of the New Teen Titans, continually attacking them to fulfil an obligation and promise he made for himself. When Dick left the Teen Titans to do some soul searching. He found himself still having to face Slade, especially when the villain captured his former teammates. This was the push that helped Dick figure out who he was and what he wanted to do. Donning a new costume and taking the name of Nightwing, he faced Slade and saved his teammates. Ready to become the New Teen Titans leader once again. Slade and Dick have been allies and enemies many times. Giving them a unique, if terse relationship. Dick has respect for Slade combat skills, but he doesn't always trust him.
Roland Desmond –Blockbuster: was a criminal mastermind and gang leader in Blüdhaven. Dick faced and stopped Blockbuster many of times. Blockbuster believed Dick was responsible for the death of his mother. For this reason he vowed to ruin the hero’s life. He helped ruin Dick and Barbara's relationship. When Dick was at his lowest, he stood by and allowed the Tarantula to kill his enemy, further showing Dick how he had failed his friends. Blockbuster achieves is ultimate revenge by making Dick kill him. Having gone past his morals, Dick felt he had also failed his mentor Bruce, himself, and being a hero. Which lead him to try to run away from all of them, and himself?
Vehicles
Vehicle Name: Nightbird
Type: Custom 2015 Kawasaki NINJA ZX-14R Armaments: Grappling Hooks
Armor type: Light
Abilities: It possess two modes which are Civil mode and Battle mode. In Civil Mode the Motorcycle is a normal appearing motorcycle with extreme speed and advanced controls. In battle mode the motorcycle splits in half, the backside turns into a flying laser cannon that protected Grayson from attack.
Audition Post Haley’s Circus, Gotham and Titan’s Tower are all places I once called home. Things have changed so fast once again. I don’t have a home any more, Bruce cast me out, I feel out of place with the Titans and Barbara rejected me. I am like a bird without a nest, flying with no purpose. Grayson would rises up from the dark gothic cathedral looking over Blüdhaven skyline. He stands right over the gargoyles of the cathedral. He would stretch out his body as he raises his arms in the air. He goes back constipating on his life. People like me and Bruce are not meant to be alone. If we allow ourselves to be isolated we will just be crazy as those we swore to fight against. Yes, but those I used to call friends and family are still out there I can’t let some of personal feelings to cloud those relationships. Maybe I should go back to them or maybe they are better off without me? Everything just seems to be the status quo without me; maybe they don’t need me any more. Should I just retire to the circus and live out my family destiny as circus performers? At least this fresh air helps with the nerves, if I wanted to retire, then why did I just make this suit? Why do I fight, for the thrill of fighting? Revenge for my family? I want to do the right thing? To protect those I love? To protect those who can’t? I don’t think it can be explained so simply. Yes, there is a rush to fighting, my family is already dead and revenge will not bring them back. Yes, there are those I would protect with my life….. He would collapse to his knees as he feels an empty hole in his chest as he remembers the time he has spent with the Titans. “I am sorry Kori, Gar, Donna, and Vic. I have been too selfish looking at my own troubles. You are all my family and I just abandoned you all without a word. I have to make things right. It is time, for the return of Nightwing.”
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I'll be standing where I belong, between you and the people of Gotham.
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Title: Batman, Insider, Matches Malone
Alignment: Chaotic Good
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Post by Batman (Bruce Wayne) on Mar 17, 2015 22:19:39 GMT -5
Basic Information
Player Nickname: Ari
Profile URL: (to be made)
Do you want other role players to give you feed back? Yes Robin:
Nightwing: Face Claim's Name: Brant Daugherty
Name: Richard Grayson Alias: Robin/Nightwing Race: Human Age: 28 (20s depending on the time fame) Birthday: March 21, 1986 Alignment: Lawful Good Height: 5’10” Weight: 175 pounds Hair: Black Eyes: Blue Physique: Athletic Frame. He is strongly built but still very agile because of gymnastics and circus performances all his life.
Training: Master Detective, Master Acrobat, Martial Artist: Aikido, Jeet Kune Do, Escrima, Tae Kwon Do, Judo, Wing Chun, Hapkido, Jiu-jitsu, Shotokan Karate, Savate, Kendo, Ninjitsu, Boxing and Tang Soo Do.
Multi-lingual, Skilled Leader Equipment: Cellphone, Microlight, Grappling gun, Bolas, Mini Tracers, Rebreather, Tasers, Escrima Sticks, Throwing Disks and Nightwing Costume.
Description
Appearance: Grayson current costume is made of a version of the Nomex fire-resistant, triple-weave Kevlar-lined material. It is an excellent protection against damage, and it's also electrically insulated. The suit is light sensitive, darkening when there is more light in the area. It is stylized with a light blue "V" that goes up to his shoulders and down to his fists. Nightwing's costume is more light-weight and not as armored protected as it was build for more speed and movement. If Nightwing need to engage an enemy who is a heavy hitter, he has body-armor overlays which he can attach to his gauntlets, his chest, his mask, his shoulders, and boots. Personality: Grayson is talkative, cocky, easily bored, very hot-tempered at times. Unlike his mentor he does not brood on his parent's deaths but moved past them. Dick has a sense of humour which is ironic because of everything he's been through. A strong leader with a personable demeanour he can keep a group together and is thought of the glue that ties the many groups and leagues together. Truthfully Grayson would rather not lead but when he is asked he usually does a good job of it. When it comes to those he sees as Family and friends Grayson will defend them without hesitation. Significant relationshipsJohn Grayson- Father Mary Grayson- Mother Bruce Wayne - Batman; Father Figure and Mentor Alfred Pennyworth - Butler to Bruce Wayne; Father figure and Friend Tim Drake - Robin/Red Robin; His little "brother" Barbara Gordon- Batgirl/Oracle; Ex-lover and Friend Koriand'r- Starfire; Ex-lover, Teammate and Friend Donna Troy- Wonder Girl; Teammate and Friend Garfield Logan- Changeling/Beast Boy; Teammate and Friend Victor Stone- Cyborg; Teammate and Friend Wally West- Kid Flash; Teammate and Friend Rachel Roth- Raven; Teammate and Friend Joker- Enemy Slate Wilson- Deathstroke; Enemy Brother Blood- Enemy Block Buster - Enemy Ra's Al Ghul - Enemy VehiclesVehicle Name: Nightbird Type: Motorcycle Armaments: Grappling Hooks Armor type: Light Abilities: It possess two modes which are Civil mode and Battle mode. In Civil Mode the Motorcycle is a normal appearing motorcycle with extreme speed and advanced controls. In battle mode the motorcycle splits in half, the backside turns into a flying laser cannon that protected Grayson from attack.
Audition Post Haley’s Circus, Gotham and Titan’s Tower are all places I once called home. Things have changed so fast once again. I don’t have a home any more, Bruce cast me out, I feel out of place with the Titans and Barbara rejected me. I am like a bird without a nest, flying with no purpose. Grayson would rises up from the dark gothic cathedral looking over Blüdhaven skyline. He stands right over the gargoyles of the cathedral. He would stretch out his body as he raises his arms in the air. He goes back constipating on his life. People like me and Bruce are not meant to be alone. If we allow ourselves to be isolated we will just be crazy as those we swore to fight against. Yes, but those I used to call friends and family are still out there I can’t let some of personal feelings to cloud those relationships. Maybe I should go back to them or maybe they are better off without me? Everything just seems to be the status quo without me; maybe they don’t need me any more. Should I just retire to the circus and live out my family destiny as circus performers? At least this fresh air helps with the nerves, if I wanted to retire, then why did I just make this suit? Why do I fight, for the thrill of fighting? Revenge for my family? I want to do the right thing? To protect those I love? To protect those who can’t? I don’t think it can be explained so simply. Yes, there is a rush to fighting, my family is already dead and revenge will not bring them back. Yes, there are those I would protect with my life….. He would collapse to his knees as he feels an empty hole in his chest as he remembers the time he has spent with the Titans. “I am sorry Kori, Gar, Donna, and Vic. I have been too selfish looking at my own troubles. You are all my family and I just abandoned you all without a word. I have to make things right. It is time, for the return of Nightwing.” 1. I don't know what's going on with the centered look, it appears nice for the pictures and the first few categories. It falls apart when you start talking about Equipment, Training, and relationships. Then it looks like just crap and lazy. 2. Relationships are called "significant relationships" because these are people who impact and shape the character. If you look at other people's applications most of them have a strong detail of why these characters are considered "Significant" and its more than just "fatherly figure" or "ex-girlfriend." You're a writer, be creative and articulate the dynamics. 3. You desperately need to use symbols in your writing. Your audition post has great potential but, like grammar and misspelling can destroy a message. Punctuation does it just as well. As a reader of your post...I have no idea what the difference between character speech, character thought, character action, character narration, writer narration, narrator instruction, are you writing first person, second person, third person? I just don't have any answers to any of these questions and that's because you don't use any sign or indicator of any of those things. 4. Additionally you need to edit the coding of your post...looking at it now, "spans" are the bane of coding and the root of all evil. They are unnecessary, often misused, and only make your work 100x more confusing to read. 1 div can do what 10 spans can do and take up 1/20th the space. Spare yourself the pain and simplify your coding. 5. Remember this profile should represent you and you should modify it ever so often so that newer players have an example to follow. This helps inspire newer players with a bar of expectations and what they should strive to achieve. 6. Spelling errors need to be corrected, I suggest tomorrow reading over this with a fresh set of eyes and mind in order to spot all the flaws and correct your typo's. Doing it tonight won't help you as your mind already "understands" what you mean and what you're saying...It's the English language that doesn't understand what you're saying in some parts due to improper spelling, grammar, sentence structure, or other. 7. Slate Wilson- Deathstroke; Enemy I'm going to leave this right here and imagine "Bitch Brian" and "Bitch Stewie" 8. You seem to have an interest and energy. That's a good thing, I'll need to see your changes before I make a final decision. Maybe ask a few more questions. In closing - You'll thank and hate me later for this, but an opportunity like this comes by only so often. He goes back constipating on his life. Going to leave that right there.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 18, 2015 1:29:24 GMT -5
I guess in my excitement in posting in this character. I didn't really bother to edit my post. I will fix it and edit it correctly for a nice finished product
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Post by Deleted on Mar 18, 2015 5:18:13 GMT -5
HI
It looks like an interesting start. Are you preferring to concentrate on the Nightwing period or interested in both Robin and Nightwing parts of his story?
I'd like to see a return to a more thorough list of relationships and also some more detail about each, not just father figure, ex-lover, etc but some description as to why they mean something. This section is really meant to show how Dick can interact with the other players and characters. We'd like to know how your Richard feels about them. For example the situation with Blockbuster at least in canon is immensely problematic for Nightwing.
The audition post is a good start, it might be interesting to have a little more happen but its good to be able to read his thought processes.
Bruce is very correct about the formatting, it makes it overly complicated and will be hard for you to edit.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 18, 2015 19:56:14 GMT -5
Charming choice for Grayson's FC.
If you don't pick a tense on that audition post, or a POV, you're going to get the whip. Just reiterating that point, along with the desperate need of that precious punctuation.
We'll talk more after.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 29, 2015 15:13:10 GMT -5
sorry its been a while for a full update live. Things have been busy
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Batman (Bruce Wayne)
Anti-Hero
Detective / Vigilante
I'll be standing where I belong, between you and the people of Gotham.
Posts: 256
Title: Batman, Insider, Matches Malone
Alignment: Chaotic Good
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Post by Batman (Bruce Wayne) on Mar 29, 2015 23:03:57 GMT -5
Do you plan on addressing anyone who's responded and given you feedback or would you rather just leave us all floating off in the ocean?
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Post by Deleted on Apr 4, 2015 9:50:27 GMT -5
1. I don't know what's going on with the centered look, it appears nice for the pictures and the first few categories. It falls apart when you start talking about Equipment, Training, and relationships. Then it looks like just crap and lazy. A: It is changed where it if left aligned. 2. Relationships are called "significant relationships" because these are people who impact and shape the character. If you look at other people's applications most of them have a strong detail of why these characters are considered "Significant" and its more than just "fatherly figure" or "ex-girlfriend." You're a writer, be creative and articulate the dynamics. A: I was a bit unclear about that before but now it is fixed. 3. You desperately need to use symbols in your writing. Your audition post has great potential but, like grammar and misspelling can destroy a message. Punctuation does it just as well. As a reader of your post...I have no idea what the difference between character speech, character thought, character action, character narration, writer narration, narrator instruction, are you writing first person, second person, third person? I just don't have any answers to any of these questions and that's because you don't use any sign or indicator of any of those things. A: That you for the compliment about the potential. I will put more symbols in when I finish editing and redoing my post. I will change everything into third person. 4. Additionally you need to edit the coding of your post...looking at it now, "spans" are the bane of coding and the root of all evil. They are unnecessary, often misused, and only make your work 100x more confusing to read. 1 div can do what 10 spans can do and take up 1/20th the space. Spare yourself the pain and simplify your coding. A: I am not too sure what you mean about the coding to me it seems very simple. Please explain. With the spacing it should be good now. 5. Remember this profile should represent you and you should modify it ever so often so that newer players have an example to follow. This helps inspire newer players with a bar of expectations and what they should strive to achieve. A:Noted. 6. Spelling errors need to be corrected, I suggest tomorrow reading over this with a fresh set of eyes and mind in order to spot all the flaws and correct your typo's. Doing it tonight won't help you as your mind already "understands" what you mean and what you're saying...It's the English language that doesn't understand what you're saying in some parts due to improper spelling, grammar, sentence structure, or other. A: Noted. With the final post the spelling and grammar mistakes will be gone.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 4, 2015 9:53:12 GMT -5
HI It looks like an interesting start. Are you preferring to concentrate on the Nightwing period or interested in both Robin and Nightwing parts of his story? I'd like to see a return to a more thorough list of relationships and also some more detail about each, not just father figure, ex-lover, etc but some description as to why they mean something. This section is really meant to show how Dick can interact with the other players and characters. We'd like to know how your Richard feels about them. For example the situation with Blockbuster at least in canon is immensely problematic for Nightwing. The audition post is a good start, it might be interesting to have a little more happen but its good to be able to read his thought processes. Bruce is very correct about the formatting, it makes it overly complicated and will be hard for you to edit. I don't mind play either as Nightwing or Robin. I personally like Nightwing better because I have a lot more freedom with my character. I wasn't very clear on the relationship section but now it should be good. Thank you for the compliment on my start. I will add more to the post. I still don't know what you mean by the formatting
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Post by Deleted on Apr 4, 2015 9:54:56 GMT -5
Charming choice for Grayson's FC. If you don't pick a tense on that audition post, or a POV, you're going to get the whip. Just reiterating that point, along with the desperate need of that precious punctuation. We'll talk more after. Thank you for you comment on my Face claim. I thought he would be the best for Dick. I am changing everything into third person. Well talk to you then.
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Batman (Bruce Wayne)
Anti-Hero
Detective / Vigilante
I'll be standing where I belong, between you and the people of Gotham.
Posts: 256
Title: Batman, Insider, Matches Malone
Alignment: Chaotic Good
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Post by Batman (Bruce Wayne) on Apr 27, 2015 3:17:22 GMT -5
Moving to Limbo since there's been no activity in 1 month.
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